Thlog 7

I think the peer review this week improved my WP2 in a major way. Before the review I thought that my paper was just about finished, but afterwards I realized that there were some major revisions that needed to be made. Such as including more detail on my sources, having a more present argument in all of my paragraphs, and based on my feedback it was unclear where and what my thesis was. After receiving that feedback I was able to go back and restructure my argument without very much work. Just adding a sentence here and there to make my argument clearer to the reader and deleting a few redundant sentences to prevent the reader from getting sidetracked. I believe that all of this greatly improved my writing and I think that this version of peer reviewing was much more effective than the last time around. I was able to ask questions about aspects that I was unsure of, but also got feedback on aspects that I thought were fine but really weren’t. By having such a diverse amount of feedback I was able to improve my project much more than I was able to after the last peer review.